Staff Writer, Natural News
This write-up listed the uses of aloe vera, a stemless succulent plant that grows to 80-100 centimeters tall; spreading by root sprouts and offsets (Disabled World, 2013).
Ancient Egyptians dubbed aloe the “plant of immortality” due to its countless benefits. Aside from first aid, you can use it as shaving cream, make-up remover, and compress for puffy eyes. It heals mouth ulcers (canker sores) as well, removes plaque, and eliminates/prevents bad breath. It can serve as superfood, too, because it has elements (e.g. copper, iron, zinc, etc.) that help boost the body’s metabolic function. If you cook and eat aloe, it can help in your digestion, boost your immune system, remove toxic material from your digestive organs, and relieve your joint and gut inflammation.
Though you can buy aloe gel at most food stores, you can likewise make it yourself. Buy fresh leaves of the plant and juice either the whole leaves or its inner fillet. To use as an external first aid, slice and open the leaves and lay it on the wound (e.g. cut, scrape, burn, etc.).
Twenty-seven percent of the write-up is passive sentences causing wordiness and hard-to-follow ideas. The author can turn passive ones into active sentences without changing their meanings. For example:
Passive: “Aloe vera gel can be purchased at most health food stores.”
Active: “People can purchase aloe vera gel at most health food stores.”
Passive: “For this use, aloe can also be mixed with almond or eucalyptus oil.”
Active: “For this use, you can also mix aloe with almond or eucalyptus oil.”
I noticed a grammar error, too, in the sentence “…and has a history as a herbal remedy in those regions stretching back thousands of years.” The author used a instead of an. In American English, you should not pronounce the “h” in “herb” and use the article an before it. Yet, in British English, you should pronounce the “h” and use the article a.
I dislike the title of the article (though I like the author’s idea of creating a “mystery” effect when he said, “This Is Why…”). For me, he should have implied that the article is a must-read by creating a title such as, “Reasons Ancient Egyptians Call Aloe Vera the ‘Plant of Immortality’.” He may also say, “Reasons Aloe Vera is the ‘Plant of Immortality’” or “Reasons You Should Plant Aloe Vera in Your Backyard Now.”
Overall, the article is helpful because it listed the various benefits of aloe vera. I recommend it to every reader, more so to those who need natural remedy for their illnesses
- Bradykinase – a pain-fighting enzyme that breaks down the pain-causing molecule bradykinin
- Superfood – a marketing term for a food with supposed health benefits
- Abrasions – an area damaged by scraping or wearing away
- Dollop – a shapeless mass or blob of something, especially soft food
- Canker sore – a small ulcer of the mouth or lips
Gutierrez, D. (2016, June 7). “This Is Why Ancient Egyptians Referred to Aloe Vera as the ‘Plant of Immortality’.” Natural News. Retrieved from http://www.naturalnews.com/054275_Aloe_vera_natural_medicine_superfood.html.